Research question: Why are performance enhancing drugs acceptable in Major league baseball but steroids are not?
Precise claim: Performance enhancing drugs should not be acceptable in Major League Baseball.
Reasons/blueprint: Performance enhancing drugs are a weaker form of steroids, that in the long run will affect athletes physical health and emotional health. Using performance enhancing drugs is a form of cheating and is tainting the game of baseball due to the unnatural enhancing of the athletes through use of chemicals to promote strength and stamina.
Complete thesis statement: Performance enhancing drugs should not be acceptable in Major League Baseball because they resemble steroids, in that they are characterized as a weaker form of them. Even though, performance enhancing drugs are a lesser form of steroids, both supplements can potentially harm the athletes physical and emotional health in the long run and in most cases are considered a form of cheating. Through the use of chemicals to promote strength and stamina, the game of baseball is being tainted due to the unnatural enhancement of the athletes. With that said, performance enhancing drugs should not be tolerated in Major League Baseball.
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yo good job on your complete thesis statement. I thought you did a good job in introducing the reader into what the problem was and then concluding in your final sentence of your thesis what you really wanted to focus on.
ReplyDeleteI like your thesis statement. It has good details, but the only thing is the punctuation with the commas. Maybe just double check that.
ReplyDeleteGood thesis.
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